Sabtu, 08 Oktober 2011

A Short Story Of My Beautiful Friend

          I have a short story about my classmate. Ratna Gustanti is one of my baeutiful friends in my class. Why do I say so? First, she has beautiful face and good looking. Then, she has excellent behaviour and very humble. Third, she is so smart and she never arrogant with all yhe strength she has. The thing that I like most are the dress and glasses she wears, for it can make the people who see her are spellbound. That's a story about a beautiful friend in my class.

3 komentar:

  1. ur paragraph is nice, but there are some word wrong type. Like word " baetiful" (1 sentence) and " "yhe"(4 senteces), it should be beautiful and the.so if ur type should be more careful in write.

    BalasHapus
  2. oh my Godness
    I don't know what happend with my writing
    I think I feel very tired when I write it, so thanks a lot for your comment

    BalasHapus
  3. Another nice writing! Ya, I agree with dwi. It's ur final writing, so u a expected not to make little mistakes. Well, why don't u state ur TS and CS really clearly? In line with ur supporting sentence, it's already great as u have tried to use transition signal. However, it's better 4 u 2 give more info on each supporting sentence. Good.

    BalasHapus